cry-
the body seems to tighten and shudder as if from a sudden chill.
but there is a sense of total dispair.
breath becomes an unsteady and labored process.
pain too great to open your eyes.
as the stinging breaks behind closed eye lids,
tears fall.
slowly streaking down your face,
then more easily streaming as the pain begins to subside.
terrible frustration relieved so quickly
through an action that truly does not make sense.
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What if you use the lump in your throat that you get when you start to cry. You could add that and use it in the beginning to connect it a little better.
I like the line about the stinging behind closed eye lids, the way the tears begin to fall. It's a line that reminded me just how it does feel. I know that sting. That was a great way to describe it.
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